It’s a metaphor for being young and realizing that you don’t actually control life’s outcomes, and how early losses shape us. Any literary devices are accidental - I’m by no means a trained poet, I just read a lot and have always loved song lyrics, so that’s how the writing comes out!
I related to this. I think children with vivid imaginations like us definitely can become writers. All the worlds I created to live in were so much better, more fun and happier than the reality of childhood. Thanks for this memory revived. Love, Virg
Was this from the fantastical space? (by the way I did check.. I was surprised it was a word) BTW.. don’t allow my observations to discourage you. If you find they make the piece clearer, consider revising it. My problem is.. I’m not a poet.. I’m a technocrat.
BTW.., that Onomatopoeia just screamed of a high school assignment where the instructions are “Use 3 literary devices in a paragraph of your choosing“. That’s really what drove me to comment. If that’s what you meant.. great.
It’s a metaphor for being young and realizing that you don’t actually control life’s outcomes, and how early losses shape us. Any literary devices are accidental - I’m by no means a trained poet, I just read a lot and have always loved song lyrics, so that’s how the writing comes out!
Ha! Def not intentional. Would have happened by happenstance?
I’m not done yet. I’m getting my $8 worth 😂😂
I related to this. I think children with vivid imaginations like us definitely can become writers. All the worlds I created to live in were so much better, more fun and happier than the reality of childhood. Thanks for this memory revived. Love, Virg
Explain please:
And then a shock scorched the earth
Ribbon ripped, unclean cut
A severed finger still beating
Waiting to be sewn up
Was this from the fantastical space? (by the way I did check.. I was surprised it was a word) BTW.. don’t allow my observations to discourage you. If you find they make the piece clearer, consider revising it. My problem is.. I’m not a poet.. I’m a technocrat.
BTW.., that Onomatopoeia just screamed of a high school assignment where the instructions are “Use 3 literary devices in a paragraph of your choosing“. That’s really what drove me to comment. If that’s what you meant.. great.
Kind of big on the onomodopedia? Was it necessary or just added for effect?